Jules the jester

Who are the Hyte?? You grabbed me in the first sentance too. You have a brillaint way of writing very enjoyable. Looking forwards to chapter 2 :D

I enjoyed it greatly. I have just began getting in sci fi and this entertained me for a few moments. All i can actually do is agree with WritersDomain.

Cheers darklight. most helpful critique i have had in a while.

I enjoyed it. I have laways wante to read one of those epic poems that are like twenty pages long. i hope yours is like that. :D

YAY. you're continuing it. I dunno why i like your Icecubes so much. I aint into that sort of stuff usually.

I liked it. Unlike your first one it was more laid back and funny. Especially the ending. But i still get the feeling that the speaker is a girl. Anyway ...

I liked it. Strange how i cant abide love poetry but i enjoy this sort of poetry. P.S. Dont post stuff like I ama Genius. (it may put people off ...

I liked it. Not much into love poetry and all that milarky(is that how you spell it) But it was short and good. Different from most love poetry as it ...

Thank god i saw that. had such a bad day but that has cheered me up. PAT BUCHANAN

I enjoyed it. My type of reading. But i did think it was a bit boring in some places. he did this, then he did that, then this Spice it ...

I loved it. Brilliant. I cant find any faults in it either. Really good. I just finished studying poetry in school and have started to read it alot more.

tell the truth. i enjoyed the first chapter by far. i just found this one a little bit of a chore to read rather than an enjoyable thing. But then ...

I enjoyed it greatly. looking forward to more of the same quality.

I am slightly hooked to the story. But you need to spice up the sentances. It is like He did this. he did that. i used to write like that ...

I have taken into account all of your suggestions and advice and have decided to keep the history bit untill later in the book where maybe the story is told ...